Personal

I am an undergrad graduating from a 4-year college. I am planning to deliver a commencement speech during my graduation. I would like it to be personal. I have came a long way from family and traditions that were difficult and hard to overcome. I am the first my family generation to attend a college and obtain a degree. Also, I have learned how to adapt and with time able to realize the importance of how to identify with people. I am a bilingual student that has a rich culture and tradition, which I have added to the campus and able to learn and teach others.

I have trouble starting the speech. In addition, I don't know when to thank my family and teacher (professors). Also, my speech is personal and aims to parents and students of disadvantage, minorities, and first college graduates. Is this appropriate or am i not including the rest of the audience??